Okay Wittians! Here it is!
My college essay! I would love love LOVE feedback on it, to know
what I should change, if anything. I can't add anything
though, because I ran out of available space. The prompt was to
choose one word that describes you and to explain why. Please
read and give me feedback :)
Sometimes it may be difficult for others to choose one word that
best describes them, but for me, one words come straight to mind.
The word I would use is
strong. Others may laugh, overlook
me, or even think I’m gloating about myself when they hear
this is the word I would you, but I assure you, I am being as
sincere as possible when using this word. Throughout my
parents’ divorce, the many funerals I have attended recently,
and my siblings moving away, the one thing I have remained is
strong.
I have been through more terrible situations than most will ever go
through in their lifetime, and I’ve done it all while still
16 years old. To start things off, my parents’ divorce was
not the most appealing thing to me that has happened in my
lifetime. I have lived a childhood full of parent screaming and
yelling, arguing constantly, kicking one another out of the house,
and much more. I can honestly say there is not one moment in my
childhood where I can remember my parents’ being nice to each
other. That’s why it came as no surprise when they divorced
in the late summer of 2010. Now most people believe that divorce
solves the problem, and all the arguments stop after. They believe
that people can be happy again once they divorced. Of course,
however, this was not the case with my parents. Even living in
separate house they still continue to argue all the time, leaving
me in the center of most their problems. However, within the midst
of all the bickering, I have managed to remain
strong.
Just as many people go to about one funeral every five or more
years, I have gone to five funerals in four years. In my high
school career alone I have seen the passing of my Grandfather,
Great-Grandfather, Uncle Billy, Aunt Mary, and Aunt Ann. It was not
until after they were gone did I realize I should have relished
every moment I had with them. Whether it was my Grandfather yelling
at all us children to shut the door, or my Aunt Mary slipping me a
piece of candy behind my Mother’s back, I should have
realized that every moment in life is precious and not to be
wasted. Eventually when so many people in your family die, like
they have in mine, people are in awe at how you can still manage to
see the light in spite of so much darkness. However, I just know
that if these family members were here, they would want me to be as
strong as I can and to remain happy in the midst of all
the sadness.
Just when I thought things in my life could not possibly change
anymore, two of my three siblings moved away. Due to the fact that
my parents were constantly fighting, my siblings and I have an
extremely close bond. That’s why out of everything in my
life, them leaving had to be the hardest thing I have ever had to
deal with. They moved to a different state, where I can only see
them once or twice a year. I miss them every single day, and there
are times where it’s extremely hard to smile. However, I
would never admit this to them. They see me as the
strong
one; the one who can withstand anything. Sometimes it is very hard
to stay strong, but I have to. My siblings understand, however,
that I do miss them. We try to talk on the phone as much as
possible, but that’s not always easy. There are times where
all I need is my sister’s comforting words, or my
brother’s corny smile, but they aren’t always able to
be there. Out of everything, that’s what was hardest to
remain strong through. But, I did it. I stayed
strong, and
continue to do so every day.
Furthermore, at the end of the day, I am
strong. I’m
not ashamed to admit it, either. There are things in life no 16
year old should have to do, that I’ve done. I will admit I am
relieved to be turning 17 in the hopes that a new year will bring
better, happier, changes. I’m not regretful of the things
that have happened in my life. They have taught me to be the best I
can be, and to be my absolute
strongest in everything
bad.
uthinkuruntouchable · 1 decade ago
sounds great
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