Burnt
Back - By Hannah Smith
A short extract of
my Horror story, Burnt Back
{I turn over in my bed with my eyes half closed,
almost asleep. When I notice two glowing dots under my desk. My
eyes burst open, wanting to know what the lights are. As my eyes
come into focus, I see the outline of a figure. The glowing dots
are the eyes of the man crouching under my desk, waiting for me to
notice he's there. My mind works quickly though, and I yawn,
pretending I haven't noticed him. Then I groan and press my
bladder, so he believes that when I get up, I am going to the
toilet. I slowly and carefully slump out of my bed, careful not to
look at the man. I can still see him out of the corner of my eye
when I calmly exit the room, leaving the door wide open. There is
no time to shut the door, I quickly and quietly stride down the
stairs, and run into the lounge where my parents are watching
telly. "We have to get out of the house. NOW." My dad
shakes his head, "What are you talking about, honey?"
"Dad, we have to call the police. We have to get out of the
house!" My mum sighs, "What's wrong? Did you have a
nightmare? Don't worry, it was just a dream." "No,
mum. Not a dream. There is somebody in my
bedroom." Suddenly my parents look
worried. "Not a dream?" "No, not a dream. There is
someone in my room. We have to get out of the house and call the
police... NOW." My mum and dad quickly jump up and run to the
door, loudly collecting the keys from the key bowl on the way. I
stop them. "Wait! What about Sara?" My parents clasp
their hands over their mouths. "I'll get her." I say,
tip-toeing up the stairs. As I reach the top step, I look into my
room and under my desk. The man isn't there
anymore. What do I do? Where is he? He
could be in my sisters room bludgeoning her to death already. I
look around me. He is nowhere to be seen, none of the windows are
open, Sara's door is untouched. What is he is right behind me?
I slowly turn around... No one there. I give up on the silent act
and charge into Sara's room, but she doesn't wake up. I
don't bother to look around me, I just want to get my sister
out of the house. I shake Sara violently, "Sara! Sara! Wake
up!" She half opens her eyes and grunts. "What?" I
carry on shaking her, to make her fully awake "Sara get up. We
need to get out of the house NOW." "Leave me alone."
"No seriously Sara this isn't a joke. There is a man
somewhere in the house, Mum and Dad are calling the Police. We need
to get out of here." Suddenly, Sara's eyes widen, and she
covers her mouth with her hand and uses the other hand to point to
the doorway. But I don't need to look. I can see in the mirror,
the silhouette of the man, stood in what was mine and Sara's
only escape...}
Please let me know if you would like me to upload anymore
extracts of the story. I hvaen't actually completed the story
yet but I have done alot of exctracts and will be putting the whole
story together soon.
Burnt Back - By Hannah Smith A short extract of my Horror story,
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Feb 19, 2013 8:56am
Sammy* · 1 decade ago
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i love it so far!!!!!! already got me hooked. never give up writing your amazing at it