moments
one direction fan fiction
PROGLUE
"Ally! aalleeyy!! wake up! today is the big concert!" said Lily.
"give me 5 more minutes." said Alley as she waved her hand
around. "No lazy! get up!" said Lily as she pulled the blankets
off of the bed.
"ugghhh fine"
"yay! what r u gonna wear!!"
"idk what do u think i should wear"
Lily walked over to Alley's closet and started to look through
all the clothes. "oh! u should wear this one! its cute!" saud
Lily "ok whatever u say" said alley. neither of them had no idea
what to
excepect..
authores note:
hey ik this is a boring beginnaing but i will post the firt
chapter tommorrow!! feed back?
fadedl0v3r · 1 decade ago
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Feedback:
I don't mean to criticize your writing, because mine is no where near perfect, but I think writing with correct grammar, and using punctuation and capitalization would definitely bring in more readers because it's simply more appealing to the eye. I also think in the future, when you do prologues, use something interesting so that it gives the idea of what the story is about and leaves people wanting to know what happens so more people will read it. No hate, I'm just suggesting! c: