azncutiepie · 1 decade ago
omg, i want mooree! :)
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DudieGurl · 1 decade ago
hehehe its really good :) just some advice - try not to get caught up in the little things so then you have room for the more important stuff :) also from the end of school to when she looks at her phone is a bit fasted paced i would write something inbetween so then it makes a little more sence - no pressure just trying to help for your next chapter :) keep on writting :)
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