kaassiieelynn* · 1 decade ago
i love your story a lot but i think you should redo it and make justin get back with elena before drew is born and then make them have a nice life but with stress they get into a fight and have elena leave for like a couple days but they get back together. i dont like them being apart and not talking and stuff...it doesnt seem like its the same story at all or anything and its weird but its good writing anyway.
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marrymejustin · 1 decade ago
I think it's perfect the way it is. It can't always be rainbows and butterflies, and if it were, it would extremely boring.
I do think they should get back together, but give it a few chapters to progress, make it happen organically and don't start over.
Just my opinion! :)
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lauren5sheppard · 1 decade ago
this doesnt seem like the justin from the beginning of the story... he was sweet and would do anything for elena, and now just because she wanted him to finish his career, he's mad at her? no..they need to be together. re-do it and have them still be in love, and have another baby (: yes.
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ixlovexyoux11 · 1 decade ago
I think its YOUR story so do whatever you want(:
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miichellexoxo · 1 decade ago
involved or have her try with justin, i think its bad thats shes shutting him out, its not fairr
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JBiebslover · 1 decade ago
Make it so they get back together again! Please!
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LilMissEpic15 · 1 decade ago
keep it going... it's fine :)
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MirMir12 · 1 decade ago
make him involved(: it would be so cute!

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YourTotalyQuirkyAndThatsWhatILoveAboutYou · 1 decade ago
mmm. i think you should keep it how it is but if you want too change it i would;

have justin, not being able too reach contact with elena for a couple months and then scooter told him, he needs a new publicty stunt {ie; a new girlfriend} and one night elena flicks on the chanel, while being pregant and sees justin kissing his new girlfriend even though they were still together and she calls him but his new girlfriend picks up and then justin explains too elena, that its only a publicty stunt but she wanted a divorce instead and raises drew alone up until his four and then they run into each other at the super market {like before} but it`s worse because it`s the first time justin meets drew but his new girlfriend`s there and then justin tries too patch things up with elena for the sake of drew but she refuses too let her son have justin as a father because she hates him and justin needs too keep his new girlfriend for his carrer but he soon announces too the world about drew and how his new girlfriend was just a publicty stunt and elena does an interview bad mouthing him {make elena, get a good job in show bizz. ie; acting cos she wanted too act in the begining} and everyone sides with elena, and then justin and elena have a fight but they end up rekindling but justin gets a phone call that his other ex {his fake girlfriend} was pregant with his child and they only slept together once {she was never really pregant too him but too his best friend. ie; ryan, chaz and only wanted more money off of him} but elena gets mad at him and reveals the secret too the world in another interview but meanwhile justin`s kidnapped drew from katie, katie thought elena said too justin that he could take drew but she didn`t and they go through other problems and towards the end of the book. one of them dies, just after they made up.

haha, i think i planned the whole story for you. erm, but you get the idea of what i was thinking?
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musicismylifex3 · 1 decade ago
plus Elena said she didn't wanna have a life like her parents or pattis (raising a child alone), so Elena SHOULDN'T be okay with having drew to herself. based on the description, I don't think Elena could've gotten even 1 month with raising drew alone.. just my opinion, you could do whatever you want with your story. either way, I'll still be reading :)))
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musicismylifex3 · 1 decade ago
I don't really like how Elena's shutting him out.. like it just doesn't make sence. even though they got off at each other, they should've at least resolved their problem after (9th month, when she's gonna go in labor soon). you didn't include any of that and it makes it sound like Justin wasn't even there when drew was born (which I hope is not true?) I understand that you need more problems to make the story interesting but.. idk. maybe instead of Elena shutting him out, she should be like emotionally depressed due to thinking that he doesn't care about her anymore. but in reality, Justin does care, he's just being a coward and having like financial trouble die to being fired? or maybe his record label is threatening to sue? or he desperately needs the money because someone in his family is really injured? family or wife? hmmmm.. try making patti and Jeremy involved too, like maybe them bugging Justin about going back to Elena. I really like how drew is saying dad first though, its cute :) and heeey you never know, maybe the world COULD accept Justin and Elena having a baby while being so young? I'm a fairy tale freak, sorry :/
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edance123 · 1 decade ago
I like the way you started it so far! But make Elena really try and shut him out because she's worried what fame and attention will do to the baby if it gets out! But have her get involved in a relationship and it goes really bad and she has to get Justin's help with the baby so she can sort it all out. Then He saves her from the really bad boyfriend by finally realizing his feelings for her, so he protects her and they decide **dramatic music** that they were wrong all along and couldn't do this alone!!!(: hope this helps!
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maddie98 · 1 decade ago
have her try to shut him out but he ends up making it up and gets involved. but have Elena have another guy in her life b4 for drama with Justin and her new bf!(:
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LaurieGlory92 · 1 decade ago
more involved it'd be nice :)
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