A Fallout?
Prologue
Emma
***
"Shut it, Nick! I don't like him." I
rolled my eyes as my little brother rolled around taunting me
about just another annoying boy at my high school.
The little 8 year old twerp stuck out his tongue and smirked as
his curly brown hair drooped over his eyes, "Yeah you doooo
you talk about him all the time and so does everyone
else!"
My eyes widened, "WHO ELSE?!"
"Alright, alright stop it. It's time for dinner."
My mother butted in trying to break up our little spat,
"Everyone come sit on the couch because its movie
night."
"What a great ol'time we'll have right sis?"
said my older sister, Jess, who was smart but b-tchy so to speak,
"Remember not to feed this one," she said as she patted
my stomach, "gettin' too plump, arn't ya."
I lowered my head. Being the middle sibling and the only one with
some strength arounf this house, it really sucked how much
judgement I got. I try not to talk about it though, or else all
the feelings would come back again. I just ignored it and sat
down on the couch. I realized my sh-t father wasn't
home, "Dad's no coming home again?"
My mother placed the rations of food on the ottoman, "Your
father is working again. There's been talk about a conspiracy
in the Octegon and he needed to go weed it out."
Nick looked up, "Conspiracy? Mom?"
My mother looked up, "Yes?"
"Is that why we don't have anymore pringles? Because of
the battles starting?"
My mother took a deep breath, "Listen, whatever happens
tonight, I love you."
"Yeah yeah love you too, Ma." Jess replied
unamused.
I locked eyes with hers. Her blue eyes were gazed over with
tears. I began to get a sinking feeling as I realized that
we are using up all our rations and that it's not just a
movie night, "Mom? What's going on?"
A tear fell from my mothers eyes and Nick began to look uneasy,
holding on to his plush pikachu doll tightly. Jess rolled her
eyes, probably thinking that this was just another fight
night.
Suddenly the power went out and everything was pitch black. The
holotron came on with a symbol that looked like a star over a
castle.
I put my arm around Nick who was whimpering at the sight of a
silhouetted man with a distorted voice hovering above us.
"Attention all of America. I am the Crow. It has been a long
road to get here but, this day has finally come. For too many
years society has succumb to a tyranny of actions. Wars. Riots.
We have tolerated this abomination for far too long. You have all
been the consequence to a disease known as freedom. That ends
today. As of this very second, you are all stripped of your
identities and anything you own to your lives. For it is your
individuality that has lead to your destruction. Your children
shall rot as you led them down a path that must now be erased and
reassigned. The way all your lives have been up until now is
nothing but a memory. This is for the new future. This is for the
fallout. This is the end."
The hologram went black and a deafening silence fell. Nick shook
in my arms. Jess sat there awestruck. My mother slowly went to
the door to peak outside for anyone.
Suddenly, the door blew back and knocked my mother to the wall,
out cold. Soldiers came pouring in and took each of us my the
arms and cuffed us. "You're coming with us, now."
Shouted a soldier above the chaos that was happening outside. I
dazely looked around and heard deadly screams of people all
around me. Some citizens were throwing themselves off of their
roofs resulting in crushing impacts. Gun shots fired from
everywhere. Windows breaking. It felt like the world was in
complete disorder.
I was holding onto Nick's hand and his pikcachu doll so tight
I was going numb. He's all I had that made sense. "Emma!
What's happening?! Where's Mommy?!" He cried
hysterically.
"Shut it, brat!" A soldier struck him in the back with
a electric poker and Nick cried out in agony.
I pulled him as close to me as possible, "Don't you dare
hurt my brother!!" I screeched.Then I was struck. A sizzling
pain down my spine that was unbarable even after I was
struck.
Soon I found myself getting tattooed a number and shoved into a
huge truck surrounded by soldiers. Children were being poked back
as they cried for their parents. Nick was still with me. I looked
around for Jess and i saw her sprawled out on the pavement in a
pool of blood.
I screamed and cried hysterically, calling out to her as if she
would stand up and come to me. Nick was in my arms trembling with
fear.
The truck pulled out into the night escorted by motorcycles down
a highway and all of us children leaned against the confinments
and eachother, crying quietly and trembling with fear. I looked
up at the night sky wondering, why, why did this happen, who did
this?
I looked down at my little brother and a tear fell.
I'm not losing you, Nick.
***
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4 faves · 1 comments · Jul 17, 2014 11:41pm
Christina* · 9 years ago
This is really good! I could see an action movie playing in my head. It was like a video game trailer. Your grammar seems pretty good to me. There were only a few things that confused me a bit. One, I would really encourage you to slow down a bit, especially at the intense moments so that it is easier for the reader to feel what your characters feel. You did a very good job with that when Emma and Nick were taken away. I have a little sibling, and I could feel what Emma must have felt. Another thing I want to say is, there are a lot of stories about America going to war, or falling apart. It would be really amazing if you could add that a special touch, that would make your story better than others. Anyhow, I look forward to reading future chapters. :)
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