chasingsunshine
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1 decade ago
its awesome, girl! haha see what I did there? ;) god I'm so funny *cracks up* xD although I agree with the slowing it down comments, I think its gonna be great and I can't wait to read the next chapter, notify me please? reply
MoonAngel
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1 decade ago
Hahaha omfg this stories amazing c: I really like it.
Just maybe u could add in some more details here and there.
And slow down just a bit.
would u mind reminding me when theres a new chap?
Thnx c: reply
Christina*
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1 decade ago
I really like it it sounds interesting. It was very upbeat and fun so awesome job on the beginning. But, yes there is a but lol. Slow it down just a little bit. Add some details, metaphors,personifications, stuff like that. I really liked your description on Alex, though I would like just a little more details.
Ex: His eyes were glowing emerald green. His silky brown curly hair was shimmering under the burning sun and his white wicked smile pierced a whole in my heart. I bit my lips trying to breathe again.
Overall, you should definetly continue sweetie :) I really liked it :) reply
chasingsunshine · 1 decade ago
its awesome, girl! haha see what I did there? ;) god I'm so funny *cracks up* xD although I agree with the slowing it down comments, I think its gonna be great and I can't wait to read the next chapter, notify me please?
reply
MoonAngel · 1 decade ago
Hahaha omfg this stories amazing c: I really like it.
Just maybe u could add in some more details here and there.
And slow down just a bit.
would u mind reminding me when theres a new chap?
Thnx c:
reply
Christina* · 1 decade ago
I really like it it sounds interesting. It was very upbeat and fun so awesome job on the beginning. But, yes there is a but lol. Slow it down just a little bit. Add some details, metaphors,personifications, stuff like that. I really liked your description on Alex, though I would like just a little more details.
Ex: His eyes were glowing emerald green. His silky brown curly hair was shimmering under the burning sun and his white wicked smile pierced a whole in my heart. I bit my lips trying to breathe again.
Overall, you should definetly continue sweetie :) I really liked it :)
reply
The Sleeping Wallflower* · 1 decade ago
I love it u should make more!!!!
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