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RingoStar · 1 decade ago umm... good start, just one thing: it's two sentences. i've never in my life read a book with a two sentence long chapter. it needs to be longer. keep working on it! it sounds like it could be a good start :) reply
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RingoStar · 1 decade ago
umm... good start, just one thing: it's two sentences. i've never in my life read a book with a two sentence long chapter. it needs to be longer. keep working on it! it sounds like it could be a good start :)
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