100 Ways to Break a Heart♥
Chapter 4
"Hello?" I said, trying to keep my balance.
"Isabelle, you don't nee-" I didn't get to hear
the rest of what he was saying because I fell over onto my
face.
"Ow," I mumbled to the floor. The phone had fallen out
of my hand, so that meant he had probably heard my embarrassing
fall.
"ISABELLE!" I heard my father yell, and I stood up,
dusting myself off.
"Yes?" I said, smiling politely.
"What is all that racket?" He looked at me all
funny.
"I fell."
"As I can see..."
"Yup." I nodded, and pulled out the pizza.
"Pizza's done."
"I know that too. Now who was on the phone?" he
asked.
"Just my husband." I smiled innocently. He looked like
he was trying hard not to yell.
"YOU GOT MARRIED?!"
"It's not like it was my choice. I mean, I was forced
into." I stuck my hand to my forehead, in a dramatic way.
"It was terrible, Papa!"
He widened his eyes. "I will talk to your husband now,
no?"
"NO! I was kidding! It's for school!" I picked the
phone up off the floor and hung up. "Chill your
ice."
***
Fifty seven minutes later, I was pulling into the Dickens'
driveway. I was nervous, yes, but also excited. I would be
"married" to the most popular guy at school. Papa
stopped the car and I got out. "Here goes nothing," I
mumbled,
walking up to the door. Before I had a chance to collect myself
and ring the doorbell, the door opened. Great.
"Isabelle, I assume?" a handsome young man in a suit
said. "I'm Bradley, and I'm Christopher's
brother." He held out his hand, and I
shook it.
"Yes, I'm Isabelle." I smiled politely.
Feedback would be appreciated c:
6 faves · 1 comments · Nov 23, 2011 8:53pm
princessprena · 1 decade ago
I like this story a lot, I really do, but you seem to be going a bit too fast and there's too much dialogue and not enough explanation. If you could explain a little here and there, this could turn out successful. Don't get me wrong, this story has a lot of potential but you need to work on bringing it out.
I spent over half an hour trying to find this story. And, there's only one thing I want from you: MORE! :)
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