*this is a song i wrote. its called "city lights". i want your opinion. comment please*

VS1-
i keep strummin' my guitar,
you keep datin' super stars.
i don't ever feel good enough,
and you know that's pretty rough.
never thought i had a chance.
CHORUS-
and her eyes,
well they shine like the city lights
and i know,
my eyes will never have that kind of glow.
and the city lights,
blind out his vision,
for the decision,
of his life.
VS2-
i keep counting my lucky stars,
so i can get to where you are.
and i don't have all that stuff,
i know i'm not good enough.
i just wish you could see,
there should be,
a you and me.
BRIDGE-
i just wish you could see,
she's a fake,
you're hearts at stake.
CHORUS-
and her eyes,
well they shine like the city lights.
and i know,
my eyes will never have that kind of glow.
and the city lights,
blind out all his vision,
for the decision,
of his life.
VS3-
and with every four leave clover,
i just hope i'm getting closer,
to where you are,
in my heart.
we don't belong,
but we'll be strong.
CHORUS-
and her eyes,
well they shine like the city lights.
and i know,
my eyes will never have that kind of glow.
and the city lights,
blind out all his vision,
for the decision,
of his life.

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*this is a song i wrote. its called "city lights".

13 faves · 17 comments · Jun 27, 2009 10:06am

cookie_monster108 · 1 decade ago
amazinly good!! keep writing! in my opinion it sounds good the way it is :)
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MrsNickJonas1101 · 1 decade ago
this is awesomeness!! i wanna post more of my songs but my songbook is GONE!! it went POOF and i can't find it and holy if someone found it and read it id die!!!
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xszabox1219 · 1 decade ago
loveee itttt
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liveLAUGHlove96 · 1 decade ago
MEGGS!!!!! thats really poppin! keep it the way it is. dont change it. love it SOOO much. =]
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maddiieex23 · 1 decade ago
Really goodd ( :
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xxpoppinskittles · 1 decade ago
this is reallllly goood. (: keep goingg!
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aapny916 · 1 decade ago
thats really good :o)
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dancer_xo1012 · 1 decade ago
i agree wiitth powderpuffer.. a little less rhymiing but other then thaat i thoughht it was amzziinng! keep itt uupp!
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alektraxx028 · 1 decade ago
goodd jobb :]
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SoftballBabe2 · 1 decade ago
thats reallyy good, and u should just keep it the way it iss
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powderpuffer · 1 decade ago
its pretty good , but you don't need all that rhyming in it or else it starts to sound like a poem not like a song. and this verse is kind of cheesy "and the city lights,
blind out all his vision,
for the decision,
of his life."
I think it's just to rhymy, but otherwise you got talent and keep on trying. :)
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ilovemusicx33 · 1 decade ago
ohmygosh! this is AMAZING!! its so pretty. i love it[:
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mrsjeter2love · 1 decade ago
this is an amazing song!!!!!

its just that it goes from first to third person to confusingly...i get what your saying but it needs to be more clear.
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xoforeverheartxo · 1 decade ago
Wiickedd Good. =]
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iLoveNicole · 1 decade ago
awww thats so cuteee! tats great that you ca write songs like that i could NEVER do that.... i could say things... but not make it into a song like you did! but um just a tip, try not to use "and" so much. you should take some out.... just my opinion you dont have to listen to it hah... good luck :)
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Maddybabyxo · 1 decade ago
thats amazing[=
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pandacutie · 1 decade ago
brava =]
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