Witty Profiles
Just a word
Prologue
I was in my room for the last time.
With my best friend, who I will rarely get to see again.
I took in everything and I started crying.
Remembering the news my mom gave me just two weeks ago.
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"Hey sweetie." My mother said as I came into the
kitchen.
I smiled at her. "Hey mom."
She looked kind of nervous.
Her smile was plastered on her face.
Her eyes were moving left to right.
My mother produced a fresh batch of double chocolate chip
cookies.
The last time she made me cookies just for the hell of it was
when she told me she couldn't come to my soccer
championship.
I took in all the details and came up with my conclusion.
"Mom.. What's wrong?" I asked her sharply.
She put her hand on my face. "Tori, were moving.."
She took in my facial expressions.
"Where?" I screamed at her.
"California." She said patting my shoulder.
I stood up and screamed, I threw the cookies on the floor.
"NO." I screamed at her loudly.
She looked at me scared, "Tori.. We have too."
"No. We don't." I said feelings the tears break
away from my eyes.
"The decision is already set in motion. You have 2 weeks
to pack."
I screamed at her, "YOU CAN'T MAKE ME MOVE." I
yelled loudly.
"I don't want to move either baby." She said
trying to hold me.
I pulled away from her, "But we have too right? Why are we
moving anyway?"
"Your dad is getting an excellent bonus in his work.Were
gonna live on the beach with a huge house and you will be able
to buy anything you want." She said trying to make it up
for me.
"Mom. No. I want to live in Michigan."
"No." She spoke in a sharp tone.
"What about my clothes, huh? I don't have enough
summer clothes for California."
"Were going shopping. Tomorrow. I don't want to here
another word Victoria. Go upstairs and start packing. Were
moving. 2 weeks from today. You have no choice." That was
the end of it.
"I F/CKING HATE YOU." I screamed at her. "YOUR
RUINING MY LIFE."
I ran up the stairs and slammed my door, something my mom
hated.
I sat on my bed and cried, cried for hours long.
I finally got up and wiped my tears and texed all my friends
telling them I was moving.
I got a bunch of 'no ways,' and 'omg I'm gonna
miss you so much.' But nothing could make me feel
better.
I didn't want to leave.
~~~~~~~
I held my best friend Alicia and cried.
She looked at me and frowned.
"I'm going to miss you so much." She croaked at
me.
I nodded. "Same here." I said and we held each other
and cried some more.
"What am I going to do without my best friend this summer?
Senior year?" She cried at me loudly.
I frowned. "Don't remind me. I'll be alone my
senior year."
She hugged me and we heard a knock on the door.
"Hello?" My father said peeking in.
"Yes?" I said in a rude tone.
He frowned at me, "Its time to go to the airport. Grab
your few bags, get changed out of your pajamas, and lets
go."
"K." I said to him in an annoyed tone.
He looked at me like he wanted to say something but left.
I got up and changed out of my pajamas and into scrubs.
I put on leggings, a northface, and beige UGGs. I messily
french braided my hair then threw it in a bun.
She smiled at me, "I'm kind of jealous of you. You get
all those hot california boys." She said winking at
me.
"Like I'm looking for love." I said remembering
Jake.
"Just forget about him already." she said hugging
me.
I nodded. "I will. I'll try. But still, I don't
want to find a guy. Since love is..."
Just another word
HEY.
YOU.
YEAH YOU.
Hi ;)
Lol. I'm really hyped up for this book.
I'm taking your guys feedback and adding more detail.
:) I hope you guys enjoy this book.
I'm going to give you guys a choice on which book I should
write a part two of.
This book, The Virgin, or secrets :)
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162 faves · 54 comments · Jun 19, 2012 4:01pm
SwagOnPoint
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1 decade ago
Great but you should do a different font.. cause i cant read it properly but yaeh part two of the virgin :)X
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bmbl
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1 decade ago
part two of The Virgin!
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gxixa1
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1 decade ago
PART TWO OF THE VIRGIN!!!! LOVE THAT STORYYYY♥♥♥
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Cherie
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1 decade ago
i love it. but can u put spaces between lines? thanks:)
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laxer_nerd97
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1 decade ago
I think you should do part two of The Virgin. And just keep doing what you do, don't listen to hate messages :)
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Ivey4eva
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1 decade ago
Part two for the virgin!!
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kokokoala
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1 decade ago
I'm not trying to be mean here or anything, but your "books" aren't entirely what constitute "book" material. They aren't that long, so they could pass off as novellas. Personally, all the "books" on witty are more stories than books. In "The Virgin" you said your climax was in chapter 15, therefore you would have one chapter as falling action and as the resolution because it was only 16 chapters. That doesn't make sense because climaxes in "books" would be in the middle and not the end. Maybe instead of putting in links to things from your stories/"books" you could describe them more. I write too, so I understand that you want to share, but maybe witty isn't the greatest place. fictionpress.com is a great writing website, and you could find more constructive criticism so you grow as an author. I am not trying to be mean, and I'm not trying to be a snob, but you also have a lot of grammatical errors (which often turn me off from stories on the internet). I hope you can take this advice into account and try to improve your writing. :) (In case you didn't know, I take writing pretty seriously)
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Bravosierra*
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1 decade ago
Hey guys :) I changed the formatting! I'm sorry if it was kinda difficult to read. new chapter is up. thanks for your guys feedback. xoxox. love you all! :)
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fhlover98
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1 decade ago
your books are amazing!
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trademarkkf
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1 decade ago
This one! But could you please change the format so the words aren't so close together? Thank you(:
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daisysplash
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1 decade ago
I love this so far and it sounds really interesting! Your stories are always really good:) But one thing. And I don't wanna sound rude or anything, but could you change the format a little so that the words aren't close together like that? It was a little hard to read:3
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pinky21
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1 decade ago
if you are going to write a part 2 you should do The Virgin!!!!
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Mufin1
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1 decade ago
I love all of your books! Yiour an amazing writing! Become and author now! xoxo And i love all but i would have to say The virgin!
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Choc_em
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1 decade ago
Just want to say, your stories are amazing and you're such a talented person. That is all x
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sweetart11
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1 decade ago
Wait what about the witty sisters book??
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sweetart11
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1 decade ago
Lol. Similar to my life - I moved to california last year :)
Exept I was pretty cool about it and didn't curse at my mom O.o
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DareeToDreamm
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1 decade ago
It sounds amazing. (:
Do you mind doing a font where the letters and the lines aren't so close together, because it was hard to read.
I hope it is not to much to ask.
You're an amazing story writer, keep up the good work. c:
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wittyquotesgurl
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1 decade ago
Notify me please. :D this seems like an awesome story!
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bekahtheninja
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1 decade ago
hello. i doubt you'll read this but i wanted to give you some advice. your stories are really good, but all of the main characters have the same background: rich, big house, popular, stunning, hot friends, stuff like that. i was just gonna say you should switch it up for this one so it's not like all the others. thats all. ok bye :)
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ellieiggy · 1 decade ago
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omgomgomg! SECRETS!!!!! best book i ever ever read!!! :)