Red String of Fate

Chapter 10

The professor looked at the phone strangely and stammered,
"U-uh, wait one moment." He covered the phone's mouthpiece and whispered urgently,
"Jimmy, there's a weird guy on the phone asking for you! His voice sounds weird!"
"What?" Jimmy took out his bowtie, set it to the voice of Jimmy Kudo, and
said, "Hello?" into the phone. The strange voice said, "You've seen the news, right?
I'm the one who stole the explosives." "What?!" Jimmy yelled.
"Give me your mobile phone number." Jimmy spat, "Why would I give
my number to the likes of you?" "Do you want to cut off your only means
of contacting me?" Jimmy grudgingly gave him the number.
The voice said, "Now take your phone and go to Greenbelt Park.
If you don't hurry, the children will die." Jimmy shouted, "What!?"
The caller hung up and Jimmy ran outside with his turbo engine skateboard.
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At the park, he met his friends Amy, George, and Mitch flying a radio-controlled plane.
"Where'd you get that!?" Jimmy yelled, panting. Mitch said cheerfully,
"A man with a mustache and beard gave it to us!" George added, "He said it was a bomber!"
Jimmy exclaimed, "A bomber?!" He looked at the plane flying in the sky.
On the bottom of the plane was a suspicious object. Jimmy quickly yelled to Mitch,
"Hey, let me see the controls!" Mitch, George, and Conan started to fight over the controls.
Conan yelled, "There's a bomb on the plane! GIVE IT TO ME NOW." 
George and Mitch yelped and threw the controls in the air. The controls broke
with a snap and Conan yelled, "T-THE ANTENNA BROKE!!!"

The three kids screamed as the plane started to fly amok. It chased them
and flew high up in the air. Then, it began to plummet towards them.
Conan turned on his power kick shoes, threw the remote control in the air, 
and when it came back down, he kicked it hard as he could towards the plane.
The broken remote control met the plane in midair and the bomb exploded,
letting the kids barely escape. Conan coughed from the smoke while
everyone started to panic. The three kids ran to Conan with a few scratches on them
and said, "THANK YOU CONAN!!!!" 
His phone began to ring and when Conan picked up, the
strange voice said, "Where's Jimmy Kudo?"
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chapter 10! lots of action... ish. lol feedback is welcome
based upon Detective Conan, a show/series which i don't own!
i just loved it and wanted to reword the story and add in my own stuff, too.