11:11; make a wish

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A l a r i c e ' s p . o . v

What if every 11:11, birthday, and shooting star wish came true?

I woke up to my alarm clock yelling at me loudly. "Ugh. Sunday. Church." I say to myself, as I hit the clock.
I stumbled out of bed and run straight to my closet. "What to wear. What to wear." I say, tapping my feet in confusion. I look into my closet, and grab the first thing I see; a white ruffled dress. I get myself into the dress and walk downstairs. As I glance at the clock, I see the 4 numbers that are being displayed. 11:11. "Gosh. I just wish the church would set on fire.." I pop a piece of bread into the toaster and walk slowly away. Just then, my mom runs frantically into the kitchen and stares. "Alarice, I just got a call from the church. Somebody in the kitchen started a fire."
I look deeply into my mothers eyes with confusion, and without hesitation, I run upstairs to my room.

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370 faves · 19 comments · Feb 22, 2012 3:22pm

XxPurpleHazexX · 1 decade ago
this is one of the rare stories on witty that has a legit plot. most of them are just about a girl who loves a guy, and then breaks up with him, and finds out she still loves him. but this- this is a good story.
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MyWittyProfile · 1 decade ago
Austin Mahon's song.. Aha :&
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dubesbabe06 · 1 decade ago
awesome!! xx
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micha136 · 1 decade ago
careful not to switch tenses
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countrygirl123 · 1 decade ago
Ohh my gosh i love thiss please write more soon! :)
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hazzahamster · 1 decade ago
That is so cool xxx lovin this alredy =)
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juju1 · 1 decade ago
love this :)
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KrzewskiL · 1 decade ago
...as i was reading this i noticed it was 11:11
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chocolatecupcakes · 1 decade ago
This is awesome! Moremoremoree!
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MayWinner · 1 decade ago
Very good!

I noticed you switched tenses quite a few times in the chapter though. Be careful, that can confuse readers. Since the previous prologue was in present tense, I would do the same for this.

I would also make more paragraphs. Everything seems clumped together into one big paragraph...

I like the idea of this; the fact that the wishes at 11:11 seem to be answered are interesting. Is it just coinsidence? (Hah, I highly doubt that!) And is it only when you wish on an 11:11 that wishes come true?

Anyway, I enjoyed it. :) Good job.
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