Witty Profiles
Hannah
A Realistic Fiction Story
As I came back from the vision, I realized it
had been wine. MY DAD AND EVAN’S MOM GAVE US WINE!?
Were they crazy? We didn’t know any better. Then I saw
Evan, standing there, looking at me.
“Evan, I-I…” I began. “I don’t
know. Did..”
“Hannah, Hannah, Hannah… what’s wrong? What is
it, Hannah?”
Then I told him everything: about the visions, about the
enjoyment, about the wine, and how I was desperate to see my
Dad.
“The same thing happened to me last night.” He said. “I don’t miss your
dad though, my mom lives with him.” I
looked at him, eyes wide.
“Can we go see them?” I asked.
“Hannah.. I..” Evan began but I cut
him off.
“Come on. Pleaseee?”
He sighed.
“Fine.” I’m supposed
to go to my mom’s today in an hour..” He said.
“Yes. I will go.”
And that was that. Dad, here I come.
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4 faves · 3 comments · Aug 29, 2011 1:44pm
iKenzie
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1 decade ago
you are an amazing writer!!! have you considered publishing a book like this?
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iKenzie
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1 decade ago
Good job :) i like english too. but i have a sudjestion, when the boy says "hannah hannah hannah" is he trying to calm her down? if so you should put an action in between her saying something and him conforting her to imply that he is comforting her, like her acting distressed. and him putting a hand on her sholder. but thats just me :)
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_HopelessRomantic_ · 1 decade ago
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awee; thank youu much! it's possible... I'm not sure. ive been thinking about writing a diary of a high schooler type book. do you like those?