Fresh
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1 decade ago
I like them and they are good, BUT you skip around a whole lot. Like you go from one thing to another without an in between. Example: She got dressed to go to volleyball, then all of a sudden it's right after practice. Also you're sentence structuring and wording is odd and points. Other than that I love what you have so far. 0reply
kawa88
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1 decade ago
i like it its reallly good keep writing! 0reply
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Fresh · 1 decade ago
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I like them and they are good, BUT you skip around a whole lot. Like you go from one thing to another without an in between. Example: She got dressed to go to volleyball, then all of a sudden it's right after practice. Also you're sentence structuring and wording is odd and points. Other than that I love what you have so far.