vannessa245
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1 decade ago
Iknoe I can't believe it.... u watched it right??!! reply
justanotherlistener
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1 decade ago
Its amazing, but it might be a little sad for a class, but I really really like it reply
ThatBitchYouHate
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1 decade ago
im sorry, i know this is random xD, but can you unfollow SocietyKilledTheTeenager, she is A FAKE, lying about cancer to get likes, she also stole my friends pictures from facebook and put them on her witty facebook and here too, im sorry if it seems abit rude but my friend is really upset that somebody was pretending to be her, if u need to know more just comment on any of my pictures
Thanks :)x reply
SheDreamer
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1 decade ago
Also, please use a thesaurus for "laughed". Try "giggled" "chuckled" "roared in laughter" etc.
Allow me to begin by saying that I immensely enjoy "Touch". It is an excellent piece of literature.
I realize this was very late, but your technique requires some work. When Jonah says "I don't want to lose you. Will you forgive me?" up above, that is too soon in any relationship tos ay something like that. How much time has passed, like, 2 days? Too soon to say that to someone in any realistic relationship.
The way you cover time lapses requires a bit of work too. something like a new paragraph every time lapse would be very helpful in following the story.
Also, please use a thesaurus to find other words for "screamed." You tend to overuse it. Try "shrieked", "shouted", "yelled", "cried out in pain", etc.
Thank you for allowing me to read your work- it is always a real treat!
-SheDreamer reply
SecretlyBrokenAndSilentlyHoping
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1 decade ago
Honey, you didn't kill him. Without you, he probably wouldn't have even made it as long as he did. reply
craziirose
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1 decade ago
Lmao or as my teacher used to say " monkey see, monkey do"?? reply
iTori0716 · 1 decade ago
OREOS!!!!!!!!
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ToriRox16 · 1 decade ago
Oh my gosh that sounds so perfect. I would totally go there<3
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abbiemarie* · 1 decade ago
I do all the time! It's awk..
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darkeyeangel · 1 decade ago
Ouchie
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vannessa245 · 1 decade ago
Iknoe I can't believe it.... u watched it right??!!
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justanotherlistener · 1 decade ago
Its amazing, but it might be a little sad for a class, but I really really like it
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ThatBitchYouHate · 1 decade ago
im sorry, i know this is random xD, but can you unfollow SocietyKilledTheTeenager, she is A FAKE, lying about cancer to get likes, she also stole my friends pictures from facebook and put them on her witty facebook and here too, im sorry if it seems abit rude but my friend is really upset that somebody was pretending to be her, if u need to know more just comment on any of my pictures
Thanks :)x
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SheDreamer · 1 decade ago
Also, please use a thesaurus for "laughed". Try "giggled" "chuckled" "roared in laughter" etc.
Always,
-SheDreamer
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SheDreamer · 1 decade ago
Allow me to begin by saying that I immensely enjoy "Touch". It is an excellent piece of literature.
I realize this was very late, but your technique requires some work. When Jonah says "I don't want to lose you. Will you forgive me?" up above, that is too soon in any relationship tos ay something like that. How much time has passed, like, 2 days? Too soon to say that to someone in any realistic relationship.
The way you cover time lapses requires a bit of work too. something like a new paragraph every time lapse would be very helpful in following the story.
Also, please use a thesaurus to find other words for "screamed." You tend to overuse it. Try "shrieked", "shouted", "yelled", "cried out in pain", etc.
Thank you for allowing me to read your work- it is always a real treat!
-SheDreamer
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SecretlyBrokenAndSilentlyHoping · 1 decade ago
Honey, you didn't kill him. Without you, he probably wouldn't have even made it as long as he did.
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craziirose · 1 decade ago
Lmao or as my teacher used to say " monkey see, monkey do"??
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haveaheart00 · 1 decade ago
lol!
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emilyanne2121 · 1 decade ago
i usually hate quotes about one direction, but this ones kinda funny
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moll :)* · 1 decade ago
its sooo good!!:) i dont know if i missed it or not but whos bree?
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moll :)* · 1 decade ago
we have a problem.....
you have to write more, like now. lol haha i love it♥
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sweetart11 · 1 decade ago
is it based on the song?
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fiesty1 · 1 decade ago
wanna talk
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itsmeeyay · 1 decade ago
heey i made a quote like this as well
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MeeAndYoou · 1 decade ago
Nope, because I'm not Voldemort.
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peacegirl88 · 1 decade ago
Dr?
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